The Battle is Real

 

The Battle is Real

By: Susan Deborah Schiller  aka Tender Lily  Photo Source: Unknown

Previous WeWriWa Snippet (The Sacred Dance of Life)

No one heard her muffled cries but him. He told her it would always be that way. And then he grinned, one side of his mouth twisted upward – but it held no warmth and made Laura shiver.

A second later she was pinned to the cold, hard ground, overwhelmed by his seemingly superhuman strength. Laura discovered she was not as powerless as she had thought, for suddenly she became aware of sewing shears grasped firmly in her right hand. Nearly breathless from his crushing weight, she stabbed him deep into his thigh. With a rage fueled by 20-years of subservience to this monster, she threw the beast over her head and his body crashed heavily down into the ravine.

Stunned at her victory, Laura raced to the road, dodging branches as she fled to freedom, grateful her feet knew the way, because her heart and mind were already numb from shock.

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This is a true story from my blog that I'm slowly rewriting into fiction. Laura is dreaming in this segment, and discovering that her dream life closely parallels and mirrors her conscious life, supplying her with uncanny wisdom that fuels her journey to freedom. Thank you for any wisdom or guidance you may have – I appreciate you reading!

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly blog-hop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at Weekend Writing Warriors, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between 12:00 noon Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST.  Then we visit each other, read, comment, critique, encourage–all those great things that do a solitary writer's heart good.

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Yetunde June 7, 2013 at 3:51 am

Susan

Wow, a snippet? Waiting for the story to be written. I am sure it will be therapeutic.

Thank you for sharing.

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Stevie Carroll June 5, 2013 at 2:06 pm

An excellent action sequence there.

 

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Susan Schiller August 16, 2013 at 8:36 am

Thank you for stopping by and sharing your feedback, Stevie!

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Linda Hamonou June 5, 2013 at 12:26 am

That's so good. She finally escaped.

Your words made this action very powerful.

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Susan Schiller June 5, 2013 at 9:20 am

Thanks so much, Linda! 🙂

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Cindy Amrhein June 3, 2013 at 9:22 pm

Powerful snippet. What a wonderful idea to take tragedy and rewrite the ending in fiction. I can see how that would help the healing process.

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Susan Schiller August 16, 2013 at 8:38 am

Thanks so much, Cindy! You're kinda close… but…

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Mona Rodriguez June 3, 2013 at 5:31 pm

Very powerful and vivid! Nicely done!

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Susan Schiller June 3, 2013 at 5:31 pm

Thanks so much, Mona, for visiting today! 🙂

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Elaine Cantrell June 2, 2013 at 2:58 pm

Go Laura!!!

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Susan Schiller June 2, 2013 at 4:33 pm

Thanks for visiting, Elaine 🙂

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Danita Minnis June 2, 2013 at 2:13 pm

Go Laura! She's really something 🙂

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Susan Schiller August 16, 2013 at 8:39 am

Hi Danita – thanks for sharing!

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R Lee Smith June 2, 2013 at 2:05 pm

Wow! A really powerful snippet! I literally have no words, but please believe me when I say you got a definte emotional response!

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Susan Schiller June 2, 2013 at 2:21 pm

You’ve encouraged me immensely – I’m so new to this – thanks!

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ann swann June 2, 2013 at 12:52 pm

Great scene. Love that last paragraph showing how even she is in disbelief at her victory!

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Susan Schiller June 2, 2013 at 12:54 pm

Thanks so much, Ann, for sharing – I truly appreciate you!

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Susan Stuckey June 2, 2013 at 12:40 pm

Hi Susan

I was sure I left a comment yesterday – but I guess not. This is a fantastic, evocative scene – very well done.

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Susan Schiller June 2, 2013 at 12:46 pm

Susan, thanks so much for visiting today – your feedback helps a lot! 🙂

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Veronica Scott June 2, 2013 at 12:30 pm

Wow, powerful and did I read it right, that this is based on a true story?

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Susan Schiller June 2, 2013 at 12:34 pm

Yes, it’s based on a true story – it’s like one of those stories that’s “too strange to be true” so I’m trying it in fiction form.

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sue June 2, 2013 at 11:49 am

anger can give us superhuman strength

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Susan Schiller June 2, 2013 at 11:58 am

I believe you’re right, Sue! Thanks so much 🙂

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J. Rose Allister June 2, 2013 at 11:23 am

YESS!! ::pumps fist:: Go, Laura! Great snippet, very evocative. 

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Susan Schiller June 2, 2013 at 11:32 am

Thanks so much… I really appreciate your feedback – I’m new to this!

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