Moonlight Escape – Weekend Writing Warriors – 7-14-13

Moonlight Escape, Part 4

By: Susan Schiller

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Thanks so much to those who visited me last weekend – I'm learning so much from your amazing feedback. I'm making improvements as a result of your helpful advice. You give me the courage to keep writing, and seeing through your objective eyes helps me to know what works and what doesn't. I can't thank you enough and I look forward to reading your snippet!

Here are this weekend's 8-sentences:

A wave of deep relief washed over Laura's rain-streaked face as Hank's familiar diesel truck roared up the hill and then rolled to a stop next to her shivering body. Laura quickly climbed into the backseat, taking a moment to quiet her ragged breathing, closing her eyes and reliving scenes of her frantic escape during the past 24-hours as the pickup pulled back onto the road.

It had been a holiday and the center was running with a skeleton crew, so when she spotted the unlocked office door, Laura had sneaked in to make a quick call to the one man she knew who seemed to sympathize with her plight. He worked as a handyman at the school, but didn't seem to be part of the trauma-based mind-control experiments that were exclusive to the isolated third floor residents.

From the front passenger seat, the handyman half-turned as he held up his cell phone. Without a word, she suddenly realized why she had been able to escape so far this time – her call had been intercepted! Confirming her suspicion, the driver, whose steel grey eyes she could see glaring at her in the rear view mirror, warned, "They're going to knock out your teeth now – that's what they do to you when you run more than once."

"They can knock out my teeth but I'll never stop trying to escape and one day I'll be free," Laura said to herself as the pickup lurched into gear making a U-turn on the narrow mountain road.

To be continued…

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This is a true story from my blog that I'm slowly rewriting into fiction. Laura, whose name means "Victorious One," is dreaming in this segment, and discovering that her dream life closely parallels and links to her conscious life, supplying her with uncanny wisdom that fuels her journey to freedom. Thank you for any wisdom or guidance you may have – I appreciate you reading! I look forward to reading your snippet!

The 8-Sentence Weekend Writing Warriors Blog-Hop Challenge: Each week, participants sign up HERE at WeWriWa, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between 12:00 noon Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST.  Then we visit each other, read, comment, critique, encourage–all those great things that do a solitary writer's heart good.